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After making the changes that my Izzy's family suggested, we then showed our peers at school the rough cut of my short film. This taught me that  some scenes just confused the storyline. They said that having the step dad there just confused the storyline and so I decided to eliminate this idea altogether. This meant changing the voiceover aswell as deleting the scene where Annie gets annoyed at her mum for drinking again and also when Annie writes a note to her mum about how she can't live with him anymore. After making these changes I should have come up with a short film that appeals to my target audience and also results in audience pleasures.